You tell me you will come.
I wait. I watch. I listen.
I close my eyes,
And I imagine you are here.
Your arrival is a special occasion;
Your presence stops everything.
With me
The world inclines its head
In homage
To you.
I wait. I watch. I listen.
I close my eyes.
Nothing.
Silence.
This waiting is a cold hell that
Could erupt into a thousand flames
This instant
And consume every unkept promise.
"Do not wait for the one who leaves you waiting."
I hear the advice;
I feel the heat of the scornful glance
That says:
Think better of yourself; move on.
I turn away, run to the window:
I am waiting
For a storm
That will not come.
One Single Impression
32 Comments
This is a very powerful work Sandy. I am re-reading the lines, savoring your work and contemplating your thoughts as you wrote this. Excellent take on the prompt.
ReplyDeletewow...there's lots of hidden meaning in those words. really enjoyed the feelings, anticipation and ideas you played with. read it over and more comes. great poem.
ReplyDeleteIt seems to me there are storms brewing of many types here. Perfect.
ReplyDeleteI hate waiting! But I love the sight of the ice crystals on the brances, very nice!
ReplyDeleteExcellent, very powerful.
ReplyDeleteThis makes me a bit sad. It brings me back to a Winter's Day from long ago. As a teenager I sat crocheting Christmas Stockings in the rocking chair which overlooked the driveway window. I rocked and looked out while I waited for my boyfriend to arrive. He never did show up on that day. My MotherDear also remembers this day, because she felt so bad for me. Waiting, always waiting.
ReplyDeleteWow!
ReplyDeleteI love that frost!
That would be terrible if you are waiting for a loved one.
ReplyDeleteI would not want to wait for a storm to happen either.
Happy Holidays Sandy!!
this is a powerful poem, Sandy. I like the use of repetition, it really evokes the sensation of waiting. The lines-- "This waiting is a cold hell that\Could erupt into a thousand flames\This instant\And consume every unkept promise." --are especially powerful.
ReplyDeleteSomethings/people/events are worth waiting for, even a lifetime. Sometimes we want to embrace the storm -- it's powerful, beautiful, consuming!
there's wisdom in waiting.
ReplyDeleteExcellent piece! Embrace the storm indeed.
ReplyDeleteJudging by the football game in Foxboro, it came. Needless to say, given my feelings for snow, I would not have been upset if it did not. Also, poetically, I thought this piece was superb!
ReplyDeleteI like the photo! things happen if you wait for them or not always do something when you are waiting!
ReplyDeleteHow many times was my nose pressed to that glass! I'm with you there,and I hate waiting too, yet anticipation is it's own reward! Nice poem. I like the lines about "cold hell.. erupting in flames, consuming every unkept promise." A bit like life, eh?
ReplyDeleteVery good piece and I am trying to do this in my life right now.
ReplyDeletePowerful-reading it makes me feel as though a storm is raging in me.
ReplyDeleteIt's so tempting to go line by line and say praise them all. You have such a gift for evoking deep emotion but also for the music and river-flow of poetry. I always love reading your work.
ReplyDeleteI like how it builds up to the end
ReplyDeleteExcellent expressions, Sandy. A cry and yearning from the heart. I understand it well.
ReplyDeleteStrong emotional piece Sandy!
ReplyDeleteDear Sandy--
ReplyDeleteI felt a tear at my heart in reading this--
Thank you for your obvious love for words...
Very sad.
ReplyDeleteBut very well said.
Hiya Sandy. Hope you have a fab Christmas. Thanks for your support and that of OSI early in the year while I was finding my voice. Best wishes for the New Year. Cheers.
ReplyDeleteSandy, this is a powerful poem. There are many layers and much to read within its borders. I also enjoyed the photos from your tree. Thank you for these posts.
ReplyDeletesaying brrr from california
ReplyDeleteOnce again a strong, many-dimensional piece. Strong yet sad. I was struck by the fact that both our verses this week included the broken promise...
ReplyDeleteThe layers are so well done - lovely work and photo!
ReplyDelete..without being theatrical,the inherently subtle drama of this beautiful poem~sings..A Very Merrry Christmas! & Many Thanks..
ReplyDeleteWaiting does indeed displace this one Moment and Hell is a good description of it.
ReplyDeletei am not a good wait-er & your words give my heart a voice in that
ReplyDeleteThis is so well measured and laid out. I feel those feelings. Brilliantly done.
ReplyDeleteHi Sandy, this is wonderful. Most of us adults have been there once or a few or several times.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Is the bottom line please don't worry excessively about something that you don't have very much control over?
I finally put a ditty on line. I've been in a crunch
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Thanks for being here.