A second of my life and yours
A breath
Those snowflakes
Together,
My lifetime and yours.
Each space between each flake
A second in time
Another breath,
Another lifetime.
What distance? What life? What death in this breath?
What value, this measurement?
Wait.
Wait with me
For all the snow
Together at once here and at your feet
A blanket, a shield
A veil between the truth
That life flies by
Unacknowledged
Except in the coming together
In the breath
To be snow,
Ice,
Water. Who can say.
Wait with me
Take with me
The deep breath
We call time.
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42 Comments
The lovely image of the white tree is so well in tune with the splendid poem.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed these verses, Sandy.
I love this photo and the beautiful words that you chose to put with it. It is so true, time goes so fast. Too fast! Nicely done, Sandy!
ReplyDeleteOf course, I love that snow draped branches photo and your poetry fits so nicely with it. We had snow flurries all afternoon while I was out hiking and I loved it so. . . might see more tonight and tomorrow. We will see -- 13th day it snowed this winter so far and winter "ain't over yet!"
ReplyDeleteHave my blessing up.
Nice one, Sandy :)
ReplyDeletewishes,
devika
wow the love the imagery and metaphor-great poem-it touched me
ReplyDeleteheart is sad and tired...... my loved one is troubled and sick ....She denies all.....I am the one faulted...... I prey God stands closer to us.
ReplyDeleteAnother breath, another lifetime... love this whole piece, Sandy.
ReplyDeleteoh so lovely.
ReplyDelete----
Each snowflake
A second of my life and yours
A breath
Those snowflakes
Together,
My lifetime and yours.
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these lines summarizes relationships. what a wonderful metaphor
pause
ReplyDeletestand still, tilt your head;
snow flashes orange then blue dots:
drop your hands and breathe
~ kitehorse
Marvelous Sandy. If only I had time. How often does this thought pass thorugh our minds? It seems to be a constant thread.
ReplyDeleteSometimes the togetherness highlights more the passing of time than the aloneness. Very nice,
ReplyDeleteA perfect way to judge time. A lovely and thoughtful poem.
ReplyDeleteThere's nothing like snow for clearing the mind and making the world look brand new. I like this Zen saying: No snowflake ever falls in the wrong place.
ReplyDeleteI appreciate the thoughts you shared on "Non-believers at Loose Leaf.
"space between snowflakes" .. One must move quick to see it, otherwise there won't be enough time ... Never thought of time that way, nor "breathing in time" ... you inspire me to think outside the box when writing poetry, to let the imagination flow, and look what can be created!
ReplyDeleteThank goodness for laptops .. cause even in the country I wouldn't want to miss my weekly poetry read.
What a gorgeous picture and such beautiful thoughts. Thanks for sharing them with us.
ReplyDeleteGreat metaphor for time, and the picture is stunning.
ReplyDeleteThe emphasis on the coming together is wonderful. So much insight here; thank you.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully expressed Sandy. I especially enjoy how you finished this work..the last few lines ring so true with me.
ReplyDeletesandy, that was really quite lovely. dept of nit-picking: i wonder if you'd consider cutting the word "bitter"?
ReplyDeleteI love this parallel with snow and time. Beautifully paced! And the final thought of taking a breath of time is so intimate!
ReplyDelete.."Together at once here and at your feet
ReplyDeleteA blanket, a shield
A veil between the bitter truth
That life flies by
Unacknowledged
Except in the coming together"_
~"The deep breath
We call time"..
(could be wrong) but can hear the clear undertones of zen in this lovely lively poem & the picture is so beautiful..many thanks..
This is my favorite single impression so far! Just Wow!
ReplyDeleteSandy, I am bowled over by the lines:
ReplyDelete"That life flies by
Unacknowledged
Except in the coming together"
Such truth!
This poem had a quiet hush about it...I could feel the pause between each flake. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteYou ever heard the Pat Benatar song "Run Between the Raindrops"? That's kinda what this reminds me of.
ReplyDeletePoignant... and sweet. And open to all kinds of different interpretations depending on who you assume to be the one on the other side of the conversation.
Nicely turned, both image and imagery.
so touching!
ReplyDeleteAnother breath/time expose...thank you, Sandy for this beautiful piece. (And I didn't get to see where the 'bitter' was that you must have removed...where was it?)
ReplyDeleteHowever, as much as I enjoyed this poem, it's the pictures of the horses peacefully munching as your car gets rocked by people-without-time that really touched me about the prompt this morning.
Love to you!
Deep breath of time - this poem carries a beautiful feeling and perfection.
ReplyDeleteTime can hardly be measured when thinking of it in growth to maturity but ageless when thought of in each breath along the journey.
ReplyDeleteWait with me
ReplyDeleteTake with me
The deep breath
We call time.
I would gladly wait with you until the end of time...
Sandy, this was an amazing piece. WOW!
ReplyDeleteBut Sandy, we don't have snow here. (That's why I don't have the time.) Just a big metephoric poem with loads of metephors imbedded.
ReplyDeleteThank you, it makes one think about time being finite in nature.
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i read it before too but forgot to comment .. glad to have a re read !! this one is so light like snow !!
ReplyDeleteSuch feeling! Made me cry.
ReplyDeleteYou write so beautifully! I always love your poems! And I love snow (and my hubs) so this one really gets me. :)
ReplyDeletetime & breath beautifully twined...your words are like a breath of pure winter air
ReplyDeleteI like how you made me think of snowflakes as seconds in time...one alone may melt quickly but gathered together through the years ones would amass a warm blanket of snow.
ReplyDeletelove the thought of measured time between flakes..... when the snow that falls are big fat flakes... wow!!!
ReplyDelete"Each space..another time, another breath.."
ReplyDelete"That life flies by unacknowledged accept in the coming together.."
Beautiful poem-
Deep breath, we call time.
ReplyDeleteWonderfully put!
I really love the way your picture perfectly complements your beautiful poem. Well- done Sandy!
ReplyDeleteOh Sandy, how beautiful this is."Wait with me
ReplyDeletetake with me the breath that is Time."
You can't know how this has made me cry. You are such a beautiful soul. Thank you for sharing this.
love-bd
Thanks for being here.